Description Validation?

[MonsterMash62]

I'm putting together another e-book, and I'm wondering if anyone can give me some feedback on the following descriptive paragraphs. I want to make sure that it makes sense and is hot enough. Any suggestions/comments/critique very welcome!

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For the first time ever, I allowed myself to really look him over.

He was wearing a light blue, long sleeved, button up cotton shirt, but it was much too tight around his massive chest and arms. It seemed as if his biceps were going to burst through the sleeves at any second. They formed huge round peaks with his arms barely bent.

His shoulders were even larger balls than his powerful arms and they created a dark shadow where they met his biceps. I could almost hear the sound of his shirt straining to hold them in.

His upper body was so much bigger than his waist that his shirt seemed to hang away from his body at the bottom. The shelf of his pecs overshadowed his waist, thick, full and incredible. And even his legs were beautiful. His thighs were thick, and the fabric of his khakis pulled tight around them.

I swallowed, my throat suddenly very dry.

[falseyedee]

makes total sense and is very hot!
congratulations on taking your stories to kindle. i just picked up a copy. love the cover. looking forward to reading it.
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