Left Behind part 1

[chimewolf]

This is my first story that I'm submitting to this fourm. English is not my specialty so the grammer is not the best. Comments and constructive critisism is accepted. This is in a memoir style.
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[COLOR=white]Left Behind (part 1)[/COLOR]
[COLOR=white]By Chimewolf[/COLOR]

[COLOR=white]I was told, by the current world government, to write my memoirs of my days at the beginning of when the shift occurred. Course they only want it because I?m the only one in the world unchanged by when the shift, as they want to call it, happened. Back when I was about 20 or it may have happened when I was 22 all I can remember was I was in college at the time. I noticed a lot of the other guys in the caf? were getting bigger and hunkier even the fat nerds where getting taller and more muscular. This didn?t bug me at all, actually I was enjoying the muscle parade of all these sexy huge guys and their little strength accidents like ripping the class room door off it?s hinges. [/COLOR]


[COLOR=white]What disturbed me was when my dorm room mate got huge, one day he was 5? nothing and over 400 lbs pure fat, he was a computer major and a warcraft fanatic, the next day he was over 7? and at least 500 lbs pure muscle. I asked him how this happened but he wouldn?t even give me the time of day anymore all he did was get off on himself flexing in the closet mirror. We use to chat about wow and classes we were quite the pair of friends. But after his change when he did talk to me it was to shove off so he could have the room to himself that night because he had a date he wanted to bring back and didn?t want me to scare them off with my ?puny size?, I may have been smaller than him but I had what looked like a power lifter build and at 6?2? that wasn?t that bad. And his forced evacuations became more and more frequent until I had to move out and live in my camping van, my only vehicle and thankfully still on display in my exhibit.[/COLOR]

[COLOR=#000000][COLOR=white]Any how all the guys at the college, including the male instructors, were becoming huge muscle bound giants these guys were making the pro bodybuilders look like amateurs in comparison. Then one day about 6 months after my ex-roommate kicked me out, it happened. One guy who was before his change a normally quiet library assistant, up and grabbed me and spirited me away to what I guess he called home. Of course now he was the biggest guy on campus and at 9? tall and over a thousand pounds of muscular beef with absolutely no fat, so how could I say no to that.[/COLOR] [/COLOR][COLOR=white]__________________________________________________ ___________[/COLOR]
Well that all for now, the next part depends on how the comments run. The next segment will have more action, I think.
Enjoy your week!
-CW

[ts1976]

I liked this! Your grammar is pretty good, so don't worry too much about it. I'm looking forward to reading what happens next.

[TheMM]

The only bit of criticism I got, is that it gets going into the storyline a bit too quickly.

I'm not refering to the muscle growth aspect, I mean the fact how quickly you went through everything like it was an outline.

Now, if that's your point, and next chapter you're going to get into some juicy details, then feel free to ignore this post.

Also, I agree with TS, don't worry about the grammar. If you believe it's becoming a more major problem, there's plenty of folks who are quite willing to help you out with that.

[chimewolf]

The next chapter is going to be very juicy. But I have to do more research reading for how It's going to play out.

Thank you two for commenting.