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 February 11th, 2006, 04:45 PM | |||
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| Marky D Jake was an average closet gay 15 year old. He was average in many ways he wasnt short, or tall, fat, or skinny. He was just average. He wanted to be more than average he wanted to be a muscle god. One day he was surfing the net for porn when he came across Mark Dalton's web site. He went on and saw pictures of him. He had the perfect body. Exactly what Jake wanted to look like. Everything down to the tatoo above Mark's ass. Jake surfed the site and saw a e-mail adress to reach mark. Jake wrote the adress and started writing an e-mail. Jake wrote( Mark, Iam a big fan, I was wondering how a guy gets a body like you. I would love some advice on how to get one. Please reply) Jake sends the e-mail and goes to bed. The next morning was a monday and he had no school. His parents were at work and so was his brother. Jake was awoken by the door bell. He got out of bed in just boxers and a T-shirt. Jake walks downstairs and opens the door. Standing there is[COLOR=red]...... To be Continued[/COLOR] [COLOR=#ff0000]Tell me what you [/COLOR][COLOR=black]think [/COLOR]     |
| February 11th, 2006, 11:52 PM | |||
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| I think it needs more work. To stop after just a few paragraphs is not a good idea- cliffhangers are fine, but you must have got the reader hooked for it to work, and that needs depth. The one I'm working on now doesn't have any growth in the beginning, but it has a good opening with lots of plot. One ought to treat an MGS just like any other story and give it your all. |
| February 12th, 2006, 09:56 AM | |||
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| I guess I'd kinda agree with Ogun... but keep at it. Being a Mark Dalton fan myself, I'd love to see where this going to go ;-). Will :-) |
| February 24th, 2006, 05:41 PM | |||
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| thanx for ur suggestions |
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