Juggernaut pt. 1

[ghostwriter]

I have posted a few stories on here now. I would like to continue this one but I don't know where to go from here. If you guys want me to continue this story, let me know and some suggestions on where to go wouldn't hurt either. Thanks

Juggernaut pt.1

Atlanta University. That is where Jamal wanted to go. He had been a fan of Atlanta?s football and now to be a student at the school was a dream come true. Jamal just graduated from high school. He had not been you typical valedictorian either. He played football, not starting, but he was still a jock. However, he maintained a perfect 4.0 GPA and had most of the top colleges giving him scholarships left and right. He had decided that he was going to major in Geological studies at Atlanta University. They had a good program and there was a chance he could study abroad in the spring if his grades were good after fall semester.

The day finally came when he stepped foot on campus. Throughout the semester, Jamal studied and studied and applied himself to his studies. Even though he was about 6 feet and 265 pounds, he was still smart and athletic. He took a basic weight training course to stay big and in shape. As much as the weight training instructor begged, Jamal would not try out for any sports. He wanted to stick to his studies. Coming from a low budget home, he had never traveled outside of the state, unless it was for a football game. He now had a chance to travel outside of the country and he was not letting a pigskin get in his way. The fall semester went by very fast and Jamal finished out with a 3.7 GPA for the semester. Turns out the weight training instructor gave Jamal a B average for refusing to join the team. Jamal was selected to go to India for the geological studying abroad program. He was elated. While he was at Atlanta University he had been approached by a lot of girls and even had a few one night stands. They thought he was a jock as big as he was. Jamal was not a fat person, but could bench 300 easily and squat 850. He was, however, a gentle giant who, when not studying could be seen playing football with his dorm buddies. Now he was in for the chance of his life.

Christmas holidays came and went and Jamal was soon boarding the plane to India. Him and 3 other students were chosen to go. Jamal was thinking of things he could do while in India other than study rocks. However, soon the plane was in India and through all the plane food and naps Jamal had arrived. The village they worked in was not as he had pictured. This village had commerce and a very nice hotel that they stayed in during the time. Their first assignment was at 5 PM and that gave Jamal 2 hours to get his gear and be at the site. At 5, they began excavation. Jamal and the others were looking for fossils from the prehistoric ages to send back to the school?s museum. While digging and scrapping Jamal found a hardened rock. It was extremely heavy so he decided to chisel it in half. The rock split after a hard hit and revealed a red crystal like rock. Apparently, magma had covered the crystal and hardened around it, preserving it for years and years. The crystal glowed a deep crimson when Jamal held it. Jamal then found an encryption on the crystal and began to read it aloud to himself. It said, ?Whosoever finds this crystal of Cytorrak and recites this encantation aloud will become an unstoppable juggernaut.? The crystal began to burn Jamal?s skin. His bulging veins glowed a deep crimson in his arms and he blacked out.
Jamal found himself back at the hotel awake and nothing had changed. He attributed the blacking out his body getting used to India?s climate. Apparently, that had been good enough for everyone else. Jamal continued his study abroad until he came home in April. His friends helped him move back in the dorm and wanted to play some football outside the dorm.

Jamal never forgot the crystal, but felt much better so he went ahead. He got in his usual position of All-Time quarterback and was snapped the ball. His defense was weak, so he tucked the ball and began to run. As he ran, he felt different. His body became hot and felt heavy. He was only wearing a black tank top and some gray sweatpants. He was running when the school linebacker stepped in front of him. He wanted to stop because the linebacker was 315 pounds of solid beefy muscle. However, his legs would not let him stop. He braced for the hit but was able to easily push the linebacker out of the way and keep going. He made it to the touchdown line easily and spike the ball in victory. He was stopped because the linebacker he moved out of the way was 15 feet away from where he was hit lying prone and holding his chest. The group was gathered around the heavy guy and helped him sit up. ?Damn J,? ?you knocked the hell outta me.? The linebacker said. You been takin steroids in India or some shit?? Jamal shook his head but at that moment he saw why he said what he said. Jamal?s body fat had dropped drastically and muscle had replaced it. So much in fact that his sweats were skin tight and his tank was barely able to hang on. Jamal ran to the gym and stepped on the scale. He stopped at 520 pounds. He looked at himself in the mirror. His biceps bulged through the tank top. He took a hand and ripped what was left of his tank top away to reveal a massive set of pecs and a rounded stomach full of abs. He looked like he had a gut but it was all abs. His shoulders touched his ears and his back was extremely thick and wide. He ripped away his sweat pants and revealed a set of tree trunk legs and thick calves. His butt was firm and round. His dick was about 14 inches long with nuts the size of large eggs to match. He was a massive mountain. Then he thought. He had just moved a 315 pound linebacker out of his way without a strain. He then looked at all the equipment in the gym and started racking the bench press with lots of 45?s. He put 6 on each side and layed beneath the bar. Once again, his veins glowed a deep crimson and his body felt the same intensity it had felt earler. He picked up the bar and lowered it to his chest at first it was difficult, then he pumped out rep after rep. 100 reps later in increased the weight with every 45 in the gym. He beched it 50 times with ease but now noticed he was bigger. Every muscle increased in size. He went outside in his boxers saw a delivery truck for the school. He grabbed truck by the front end and felt the power surge in his body again. The truck began to rise after a while was soon over the head of Jamal. Jamal?s body had grown to accomadate the size of his muscles. He was about 9 feet tall and weighed close to 950 pounds. He was lovin the size and would test it out tomorrow. He was a juggernaut.

[omelissokomos]

It's interesting that Jamal started out as a "gentle giant" and now the Cytorrak crystal seems to have awakened his dominant and perhaps dark side. There's always a price to be paid with these kinds of things. Will Jamal forsake his innocence and fully embrace being a juggernaut?

[Mad Dog]

Indeed, you'd think being the avatar of Cytorrak would have a drawback... :3

[iceman75]

I liked it, it was straight, short and to the point. That's the way I like my stories, not much background, just straight to the action. And the action was pretty good too, hope to see some strength feats in coming chapters.

[Strmchaserboi]

I second what iceman75 said about the strength feats. noting like muscle altering metal and other objects!

[muscl4life]

It's an excellent starting point. The Juggernaut character is indeed a divided man - the sheer power he is granted also tries to corrupt his mind and soul, so you could try to focus on Jamal's questions - surrendering to the temptation of such massive, colossal power or, since he is an excellent student, trying to uncover anything that might help.

You can also add new Marvel characters, since you 'borrowed" Juggie - some heroes would really try to stop this "menace"

Anyways, whatever you decide, this story has tremendous potential, because I also am fascinated by Juggernaut's uncanny size and muscularity. Since I mentioned it - I always this plot where the scrawny Jimmy Olsen retrieves the Cytorak Jewel after a fight between the collossus and Superman (yeah, I also love crossovers!), unaware to the fact that it was the enemy's powersource - needless to say that he's turning into a new massive red haired/green eyed muscle monster (just like Cain Marko also has red hair and green eyes )

But I digress Your story is much thicker and better developed, I am sure we will enjoy anything you decide to do.

Take care

[chocomus]

Great beggining!

I didn't understand much about Juggie before reading a comic where it's said that he is part of 8 ... avatars or something. 4 man, 4 women who after fighting echother, would let the (destroyed) world to his master. Apart from Cyttorak's crimsom cristal the other seven objects are: The kestral key of Krakkan, Ikon's ivory idol, Valtorr's green vial, Watoomb's wonderful waterfall, Farallah's formidable fist, Balthaak's shiny fire and Raggadorr's rubi ring. More or less those are their names (I've just translated them from spanish. If somebody knows they are wrong, say it please. I think the first letter must be the same: Ragador rubi ring=rrr, and so on). The other avatars are: Conquest(fem), Madness(fem), Downfall (Male), Storm(fem), Carnivore(male), Hell(fem) and...Cantero (Male). Sorry this last one i don't know how to translate, he constructs things. Of course you can make them all male. Oh, and the other transformation places are: Ireland, Kenya, Tahiti, Australia, Peru, Canada and Tailand.


I think that if you want to add more marvel characters, those are the most adequate, although Hulk is the most hulking-up one.