taixdavis 1st

[Kitex989]

this is my 1st story that I have ever done its mostly muscle worship and if you wana know why I wrote this check my myspace myspace.com/i_love_my_senpai
now for the story btw this is a story between Tai and Davis but I used the jp names Tachi=Tai and Davis=Daisuke



Daisuke, Daisuke wake up Daisuke slowly opened his eyes TACHI-SENPI!
The boy was so suprised by the person in front of his eyes Tai I thought
you were supposed to be at work? I was but when Kari called me and told me
what happened I told my boss I need to take care of something and if he doesnt
like it he can take his job and shove it! Ha ha ouch Daisuke try not to laugh
so hard Tk really did a job on you today but its ok now your with me.
Man what does Kari see in a ass like him anyway, a soft knock was heard on the
door and Kari slowly stepped in well Daisuke nothing now im so sorry Tk did this
to you he really is such a hot head, Tai started laughing yea it must run in
the family cus Matt is the same way. Everyone laughing happily yet Daisuke
still wincing in pain. Daisuke stay in my bed tonight im gona go drop Kari
home ok? Ok Tachi-senpi (in his head of course what I cant get a goodnight kiss)
Sometimes Daisuke hated having these fealings for Tachi heck come on I cant think
like that he is my mentor my friend heck he is my fucking god and I would do
anything for him before making himself depressed he slowly drifted off to sleep.
Daisuke slowly opened his eyes only to shut them because of the blinding sun realizing he was facing the
window. He turned his head away from the window and saw the small clock which
in red numbers said 8:15a.m. O god im gona be so late Daisuke in a panic jumped
out of bed and went for the door only to be slamed in the face with it. Now on the
floor rubbing his forehead o sorry Dai you ok, yea im fine BUT IM LATE FOR CLASS!
Tachi sipping his coffee chuckling uhh Dai its Saturday Tachi pointed to the
calender which suprisingly stayed on the door. Glad to see your better Dai I was
worried.(If you were so dam worried you should have fucking slept with me) heh
its ok Tachi-Senpai im fine now well thats good im gona head to the gym you wana
come? No thanks heh im kinda weak I would feal and probably look stupid well it never
hurts to have a little muscle Tai then removed his shirt to prove his point. Daisuke
quickly ran to the kitchen to hide what would see be a very visible buldge.
Dai something wrong? No nothings wrong I uhh just thought you might want some
water (and maybe let me just kiss you from head to toe) he then stopped day
dreaming and threw the bottle to Tachi. Well ok if you need anything just
call my cell and there are some movies under the tv if u wana watch something cya.
Daisuke now finally gave a breath of releaf (he is so hot its not fair why do I have
to suffer like this) Daisuke then decided to search for something to watch he
checked the shelf under the tv but nothing, then he saw a little door he opened
it and almost fainted at the site of so many porn dvds (wait a sec this are guys??)
That means... HE IS with a bright blush on his face he became lightheaded thinking
of all the things they could do (well first I can tell him how I have always loved him
and how fucking hot he is and how I just wana love him how he should be hell he is
MYsenpai) After comming off his rush he fell on the couch about 5 minutes later
Tai walks in hey Daisuke did you have fun? Yea I watched uhh American Pie its so funny when
Jim has his well thing in the pie. Haha yea that is 1 of the best parts Dai (I wana stick my
thing in you like a pie) Umm Tachi-senpai why are you blushing? O umm no reason I was just
thinking about something this guy a the gym said. O ok hey Tachi-senpai Kari must watch alot
of porn right? Uhh I guess she does Dai but I mean how would I no I mean I didnt have anyone
to watch over me when I saw porn so why ruin it for her? O.. I see yea something wrong Dai
taking a sip of his water. Well actually Tachi there is how long have you been watching GAY porn?
Spiting the water all over Daisuke WHAT ARE YOU TALKING ABOUT? Daisuke slowly walked over to
the door SHIT! Tachi sighed well I guess I might as well tell you yea im gay your probably gona
tell me how you hate me and im some cock sucking fag right sighing closing his eyes. Well Tachi-Senpai
I could do that or.. I could do this Daisuke got on his toes and slowly kissed Tachi on the lips.
He lips were soft and moist Tachi slowly kissed back Dai is there something you wana tell me?
Laughing loudly sure how about the fact I have loved you and that body of yours forever. Tachi
gave a devilish look really removing his shirt, pants, shoes, and socks. Why dont you come over
here and tell your senpai what you like about him winking at Daisuke. He felt so weak that all
he could do was crawl to his beloved senpai slowly kissing his legs and licking his thighs.
He then moved up to his balls sticking his face between his leg and his sack his face instantly
covered in the hot abyss he slowly started licking his soft sack then took a deep breath to get in
his sent fealing a bit dizzy from the smell. Tachi held his head up hey there is still alot more
of me to go putting a smirk on his face he reached for his pants I mean if you dont want to then
its ok. NO GOD NO! Daisuke shouted dam Daisuke it was a joke, with a soft reply in his voice with
his head down well it wasnt very funny.With a sad face o im sorry let me make it up to you Tachi
lifted Daisuke's head up to his pulsing cock will this make it better? Daisuke smiled and nodded
and softly started to suck on the tip of his cock Tachi moaning Daisuke then quickly pulled his mouth
off his cock letting the cold air hit his tip. Tachi looking up in suprise something wrong Dai,Daisuke
looking up yea actually I think im just gona go home he stood up reaching for the door.Tachi then shouted
Daisuke you have got to be shiting me! Daisuke smiled and turned around of course I am he then returned
on his knees sucking his beloved senpai. Trying to speak through his moans of pleasure Daisuke ugh.. your
a little bitch you know that right? Once again removing his mouth from his cock smirking saying well I learned
from the best. Tachi laughing taking Daisuke's head and putting his lips right back on his cock you know what
Dai I think you just need to shut up. Daisuke decided to suck faster and use his teeth causing his senpai
to moan and push right deep in the back of his mouth. Daisuke gladly drank all his senpai could offer he
then fell back on the couch panting heavily. Tachi looked down at him umm.. Dai that was just my lower half
dont you want the rest of your treat he said smiling devilishly once again. Daisuke then grabbed Tachi causing
him to fall right on top of him he then started running his wet tongue all across Taichi's abs
following the path of his 6pac up and down. Tachi got up and decided to flex his arms right in front of Davis
lips Daisuke was just about to stick his tongue out to lick it when Tachi quickly pulled his arm back.
O Daisuke did u wana lick this flexing his bicep all Daisuke could do was nod up and down like a speechless
baby. He clung to Tachi's arm kissing and licking all up Tachi's left arm. Tachi then set him back on the
couch and smirked now Daisuke your only doing half a job as he said this flexing his right arm Daisuke
didnt even wait he just clung to Tachi's arm and started kissing and licking it as well. Tachi laugh and
used his other free arm to throw Daisuke over his shoulder and walked up the stairs and dropped Daisuke
on the bed.Ow that hurt Tachi then climbed on top of Daisuke his breath tickling his ear whatever Dai
you know you love it. Tachi then got up and started searching in his dresser, ah here it is. Here what is
Daisuke asked while undressing himself
trying to find out what it was but couldnt see past his senpai's massive body. Tachi then spoke not looking
at Daisuke so umm Daisuke what was the part of American Pie that you liked again? Daisuke sounding anoyed Tachi-Senpai
I told you when his thing goes in the PIE!! Just then Daisuke felt 2 cold fingers press right deep into his ass.
At first it felt strange to him but then when his senpai added the 3rd Daisuke relized what was going on
and started bouncing up and down on the bed. My my eager arent we Dai you want this inside you bad dont ya?
Daisuke just looked into his senpai's eyes like a kid wanted candy Tachi then crawled over Daisuke and lifted
his legs Dai this might hurt a bit tell me if you want stop ok? O Tachi just shut up and fuck ME!! Damit! stop doing that
senpai Tachi just looked and Daisuke and smiled kissing him while rocking back and forth until.
O sen..pai Daisuke covered both of them in his own juices Tachi then pulled out and came right on Daisuke's chest
Daisuke curiously took the cum on his chest and mixed it with his senpai's god that taste good he then
took his fingers and took some more off his chest and offered it to Tachi dam that is good Tachi said.
Daisuke laughed and hugged his senpai Tachi wrapped his arms around his little lover. Daisuke looked up
into Tachi's eyes do you think we could sell this stuff licking his lips Tachi kissed his soft lips and
sliped his tongue in his mouth savoring the taste naw Dai im sure thats ilegal besides I dont like to share
Um.. Tachi-senpai can I stay here awhile longer? Tachi looked down and Daisuke and kissed his forehead you
can stay as long as you need to besides, I wouldnt have it any other way they both kissed a fell asleep in
eachothers arms.

[chocomus]

Hot, but difficult to read. You should separate the lines whenever a different character speaks or thinks and the part from a dialoge from the narration. Something like:

"Daisuke, Daisuke wake up"

Daisuke slowly opened his eyes "TACHI-SENPI!"
The boy was so suprised by the person in front of his eyes
"Tai I thought you were supposed to be at work?"

"I was but when Kari called me and told me what happened I told my boss I need to take care of something and if he doesnt like it he can take his job and shove it!"


I suppose you used notepad. (That bitch....I hate it) Word is better.
I hope you don't mind critics. Don't feel bad, they are for your own good. But, you know what? I liked it and I'd like to read the second part.

[TheMM]

I've probably said it a few times, I like Jarte a lot more, doesn't have any of the stuff that you really don't need most of the time like Word has. Is just a word processor, nothing more. Most importantly, it's FREE! I love free things...anyways enough randomness.

It's not a bad story. It needs work in grammar and other things, but other then that, it's really not bad.

First you should fix the paragraphing, that will give you a better idea what grammar, spelling, and punctuation you need to fix.

Like choco, hope you don't mind criticism, but it really helps.

[Kitex989]

yea I did use notepad basicly I wrote this all in 1 night cus I just had a rush of ideas and once I started writing it I couldnt stop till it was finished
and I was already prepared for people saying how it looks cus 1 I suck at english so thats why it kinda sloppy but at least the story itself wasnt bad so im fine with that *pulls out a match notepad you burn in hell ^_^

[TheMM]

Kitex allowed me, so here's the story with a lot of revisions to make it look a lot nicer. Some things are completely changed, but as I could tell, I kept the general thought that Kitex wanted.
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"Daisuke, Daisuke wake up" Daisuke slowly opened his eyes
"TACHI-SENPI!" Dai replied.

The boy was so surprised by the person in front of his eyes.

"Tai I thought you were supposed to be at work?" ask Dai.
"I was but when Kari called me and told me what happened I told my boss I need to take care of something and if he doesn't like it he can take his job and shove it!" replied the other boy.

"Ha ha" said Dai before slightly leaning over from pain.
"Ouch Daisuke try not to laugh so hard. Jee, Tk really did a job on you today, but, it's ok now your with me." said Tai carefully grabbing his friend to make sure he was ok.
Still in pain Dai replied,"Man what does Kari see in a ass like him anyway."

A soft knock was heard on the door and Kari slowly stepped in. Once she was inside she quickly apologized, "Well Daisuke I'm so sorry Tk did this to you he really is such a hot head"
"Tai started laughing yea it must run in the family because Matt is the same way." came the painful reply.

Everyone was laughing happily at his joke, yet Daisuke was still wincing in pain.

"Daisuke stay in my bed tonight I'm gonna go drop Kari home ok?" Tai told Dai.

"Ok Tachi-senpai" he replied, not really minding. Once they were gone though, he sighed to himself, wondering why he couldn't get a goodbye kiss from the person he loved.

Sometimes Daisuke hated having these feelings for Tachi, they were friends, Tai was almost his mentor of sorts even. To Dai, Tachi was practically a god! He would do anything to get the love that he so desired from Tai as Davis slowly drifted off to sleep.

Daisuke slowly opened his eyes only to shut them because of the blinding sun. Realizing he was facing the
window he turned his head away from the window and saw the small clock which
in red numbers said 8:15 a.m.

"O god I'm gonna be so late!" Daisuke said in a panic.

He quickly jumped out of bed and went for the door only to be slammed in the face with it.

Now on the floor rubbing his forehead he looked up to see Tai standing there.

"Oh, whoops, sorry Dai you ok" said Tachi, seeing his friend on the floor.
"Yea I'm fine but I'm late for class!" replied Davis, getting off the floor still rubbing his head.

Tachi sipping his coffee chuckling softly, spoke, "Dai its Saturday." He then pointed to the
calendar which surprisingly stayed on the door. "Glad to see your better Dai I was
worried."

Davis thought to himself, "If you were so worried, why didn't you want to sleep with me or anything?"
"Anyways," said Tai, almost finished with his coffee, "do you want to work out in the gym if you feel up to it?"
"No thanks heh I'm kinda weak I wouldn't do very well and probably look stupid." said Dai, his headache starting to go away.
"Well it never hurts to have a little muscle," with that Tai then removed his shirt to prove his point.

Daisuke took one look then quickly ran to the kitchen to hide what would see be a very visible bulge.

Seeing that, Tachi was a bit worried, "Dai something wrong?"
"No nothings wrong I just thought you might want some water," said Dai. "Maybe let me just kiss you from head to toe as well," he finished in his head.

He then stopped daydreaming and threw the bottle to Tachi.

"Well ok if you need anything just call my cell and there are some movies under the TV if you wanna watch something cya." said Tachi, before heading out to do whatever it was he was going to do.

Daisuke now finally gave a breath of relief and spoke to himself, a habit he was quickly making, "Tachi is so hot. It's not fair. Why do I have
to suffer like this?"

Daisuke then decided to search for something to watch. He checked the shelf under the tv but nothing, then he saw a little door. He opened it and almost fainted at the site of so many porn dvds.

"That means he's..." said Davis with a bright blush on his face.

he became lightheaded thinking of all the things they could do. Like how he could tell him how much he loves him. Especially tell him how hot he is. Then if the feeling is mutual they could make hot love to each other as Davis told Tachi how he wanted him to be his senpai.

After coming off his rush he fell on the couch, breathing heavily.

About 5 minutes later...

Tai walks in and greets Davis, "Hey Daisuke did you have fun?"
"Yea I watched uhh American Pie its so funny when Jim has his thing in the pie." said Davis, seemingly revitalized when Tai walked into the room.
"Haha yea that is 1 of the best parts Dai." replied Tai.
Davis thought to himself, "I wanna stick my thing in you like a pie." He then noticed Tachi blushing, "Umm Tachi-senpai why are you blushing?"
"O umm no reason I was just thinking about something this guy a the gym said." replied Tai quickly.

"O ok hey Tachi-senpai Kari must watch a lot of porn right?" asked Davis curiously.
"Uhh I guess she does Dai, but I mean how would I know, I mean I didn't have anyone to watch over me when I saw porn so why ruin it for her? Anyways, is something wrong Dai?" said Tachi taking a sip of his water.
"Well actually Tachi there is," replied Dai, "How long have you been watching gay porn?"
Spiting the water all over Daisuke, "What are you talking about? I've never watched a single gay porn in my life!" he said, quite clearly in a flutter with a bit of panic mixed in.

Daisuke slowly walked over to the door and opened it.

"Damn, you got me Davis," Tachi sighed, "Well I guess I might as well tell you that yes I'm gay your probably gonna tell me how you hate me and I'm some sort of freak, right?" "Well Tachi-Senpai I could do that or.. I could do this." replied Daisuke as he got on his toes and slowly kissed Tachi on the lips.
"His lips are so soft and moist..." thought Tachi as he slowly kissed then said, "Dai is there something you wanna tell me as well?"

Laughing loudly Dai replied, "Sure how about the fact I have loved you and that body of yours forever."

Tachi gave a devilish look really removing his shirt, pants, shoes, and socks.

"Why don't you come over here and tell your senpai what you like about him." said Tachi, winking at Daisuke.

He felt so weak that all he could do was crawl to his beloved senpai slowly kissing his legs and licking his thighs. He then moved up to his balls sticking his face between his leg and his sack. His face showed pure pleasure, covered in the hot abyss he slowly started licking his soft sack then took a deep breath to get into it even more. Tai's scent made Dai feel a bit dizzy from the smell.

Tachi held his head up and spoke, "Hey there is still a lot more of me to go," Putting a smirk on his face he reached for his pants, "I mean if you don't want to then it's ok."
"No god no!" Daisuke shouted.
"Daisuke it was a joke," said Tachi with a soft reply in his voice.
With his head still down Davis said, "Well it wasn't very funny."
Sad-faced Tai replied, "I'm sorry let me make it up to you."
Tachi lifted Daisuke's head up to his pulsing cock and continued, "Will this make it better?"

Daisuke smiled and nodded and softly started to suck on the tip of his cock. Tachi moaned, Daisuke then quickly pulled his mouth off his cock letting the cold air hit his tip. Tachi looked down in surprise at Daisuke.

"Is something wrong Dai?" asked Tachi.
Looking up Davis replied, "Yea actually I think I'm just gonna go home."

He stood up going for the door.

Tachi then shouted, "Daisuke you have got to be kidding me!"
Daisuke smiled and turned around, "Heh, of course I am."

He then returned on his knees sucking his beloved senpai.

Trying to speak through his moans of pleasure "Daisuke ugh.. your a little bitch you know that right?"
Once again removing his mouth from his cock smirking, "Well I learned from the best."
Tachi chuckled through his moans, taking Daisuke's head and putting his lips right back on his cock.

"You know what Dai I think you just need to shut up." said Tachi.

Daisuke decided to suck faster and use his teeth causing his senpai to moan and push right deep in the back of his mouth. Daisuke gladly drank all his senpai could offer he then fell back on the couch panting heavily.

Tachi looked down at him, "Dai that was just my lower half. Don't you want the rest of your treat?" he said smiling devilishly once again.
Daisuke then grabbed Tachi causing him to fall right on top of him. He then started running his wet tongue all across Tachi's abs following the path of his 6 pack up and down. Tachi got up and began to flex his arms right in front of Davis. Daisuke was just about to stick his tongue out to lick it when Tachi quickly pulled his arm back.

"O Daisuke did you wanna lick this?" said Tai, flexing his bicep.

All Daisuke could do was nod up and down like a speechless baby. He clung to Tachi's arm kissing and licking all up Tachi's left arm. Tachi then set him back on the couch and smirked.

"Now Daisuke you're only doing half a job." as he said this he started flexing his right arm.

Daisuke didn't even wait he just clung to Tachi's arm and started kissing and licking it as well. Tachi laughed and used his free arm to throw Daisuke over his shoulder and walked up the stairs and dropped Daisuke on the bed. Tachi then climbed on top of Daisuke his breath tickling his ear.

"Ow, that hurt!" said Dai, slightly annoyed.
"Whatever Dai you know you love it." came the reply. Tachi then got up and started searching in his dresser, "Ah here it is."

Daisuke wondered what 'it' as he was undressing himself. He was trying to find out what it was but couldn't see past his senpai's massive body. Tachi then spoke not looking at Daisuke.

"So Daisuke what was the part of American Pie that you liked again?"
Daisuke still sounding a bit annoyed, "Tachi-Senpai I told you when his thing goes in the pie!"

Just then Daisuke felt 2 cold fingers press right deep into his ass. At first it felt strange to him but then when his senpai added the 3rd Daisuke realized what was going on and started bouncing up and down on the bed.

"My my eager aren't we Dai you want this inside you bad don't ya?" said Tai.

Daisuke just looked into his senpai's eyes like a kid wanted candy Tachi then crawled over Daisuke and lifted his legs.

"Dai this might hurt a bit tell me if you want stop ok?" said Tachi.
"O Tachi just shut up and do it!"

Tachi just looked and Daisuke and smiled kissing him while rocking back and forth until...

"Sen..pai" said Daisuke, as he covered both of them in his own juices.

Tachi then pulled out and came right on Daisuke's chest. Daisuke curiously took the cum on his chest and mixed it with his senpai's. He took his fingers and took some more off his chest and offered it to Tachi.

"Damn that is good," Tachi said.

Daisuke laughed and hugged his senpai Tachi wrapped his arms around his little lover. Daisuke looked up into Tachi's eyes.

"Do you think we could sell this stuff?" said Dai,licking his lips.
Tachi kissed his soft lips and slipped his tongue in his mouth savoring the taste, "Naw Dai I'm sure that's illegal besides I don't like to share"
"Um.. Tachi-senpai can I stay here awhile longer?" asked Davis carefully.
Tachi looked down and Daisuke and kissed his forehead, he replied, "You can stay as long as you need to besides, I wouldn't have it any other way."

They both then kissed and fell asleep in each others arms.

[Kitex989]

thanks MM btw chocomus thought I should leave it with a cliffhanger I forget to put this in my 1st post after but remember Davis never told Tai what TK did to him ^_-

[TheMM]

That's quite true, but you can simply add onto it.

[chocomus]

I like it more now!
Looking forward for the next chap!