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Snippet - Boyfriend and Bully (TBC) I'm not a very good writer. Scratch that: I'm a pretty poor writer. My spelling is OK, but my grammar is awful. I have a lot of ideas, but very rarely get them down onto paper so it was a surprise for me when this story partly wrote itself. It's probably one of the better, most complete stories I have that's based on muscle growth. I have other transformation stories in my head, or in the works, but none of them are really suitable for the site, except maybe my Werejock story which I haven't written yet. Anyway, enough of the boring introductions that people will probably, and rightfully, skip over and on to the actual story snippet: Quote:
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__________________ A nerdy English bloke who wants to be a decent author someday. I sometimes wish that I could be some big, dumb American jock who thinks with his dick and only cares about scoring on the field and in bed. Last edited by Xander; January 17th, 2011 at 05:58 PM. |
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Sounds great mate... Post it all! JJ __________________ Beer Drinking, Rugby Loving, 100% Welsh Beef |
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The dialogue is realistic and the visuals are pretty clear which btw isn't easy to do. It seems that all you have to do is link your snippets together with a overall theme. Write down all your snippet ideas on paper then think of a theme to link them. Think about what that might be during the day when you're doing other things, you'll be surprised how easy it is to come up with one. So far well done. |
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Am I misusing the term 'snippet'? I mean that these are bits from what I've written to give a small idea of what the story is about. I have a decent idea where the story starts and where it is going; my main issue is the setting. I've made it American because it feels 'right' and also to appease more towards the larger amount of Americans there are, or at least how much people recognise American settings to most others. The issue is that I don't know what age the characters should be. I like the idea of them being collage age, but them being in their early 20's with jobs and a flat, or apartment rather, seems more fitting considering where the story is going and what it needs to contain. Steve, at least, needs to be of legal drinking age and that is 21 in America. __________________ A nerdy English bloke who wants to be a decent author someday. I sometimes wish that I could be some big, dumb American jock who thinks with his dick and only cares about scoring on the field and in bed. Last edited by Xander; January 17th, 2011 at 05:58 PM. |
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You don't have to set in in the US. In fact I think it's more interesting and new to see characters in a foreign enviornment. Create the story as you want it, don't worry about what others wish. Be true to yourself and your ideas. If what you've written are parts of a larger story then great job, post the whole thing! |
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Even in light of the recent policy shift to "no underage smut", the site's hardly a police state... and I bet you'd have a hard time finding even one person who doesn't understand the drinking-age reality: Legality be damned, underage drinking is a widespread and regular occurrence at pretty much every college in the country. (And nearly as prevalent in the high schools, probably!) Nobody's going to be scrutinizing Steve's ID, is my point. He could easily get away with using a fake. ...I like what you've shown of the story! It reminds me a bit of magusX's "Infiltration", in the archive (also at http://www.cyoc.net/modules.php?op=m...y&story_id=542 ) ? definitely be interesting to see where you take things from what you've posted so far! |
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What you've posted so far is great. Tone, dialogue are good. It describes the setting well enough, without boring us with too many details. I liked the use of the spaghetti too. I'd really like to read the rest. If you want someone to do an edit pass, feel free to send it my way: monstermash62 at hotmail dot com. |
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And yes I have read that story. It was some of the inspiration for this one. I do actually like 'corruption' tales or 'becoming the mask', even if they do usually have downer endings. Quote:
I wanted to have the discussion over dinner and spaghetti was the first thing that came to mind and seemed fitting. Thank you for all your responses. __________________ A nerdy English bloke who wants to be a decent author someday. I sometimes wish that I could be some big, dumb American jock who thinks with his dick and only cares about scoring on the field and in bed. |
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I don't know much about writing but I do read on the internet a lot lol. The one thing I'll suggest is separation, Use paragraphs or single/double lines when you post your story. A wall of text with no paragraphs hurts the eyes. As for some setting suggestions. You could do high school. Adam being a senior in his graduating year making him 18-19, and Steve being held back for 2 years making him 20-21. College can work too but the whole "bully" idea has more of a high school feel. But what ever you decide i wish you the best =D |
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