Its just a game: Part 2

[anglekindle]

(Removed cause it was horrible)

[chocomus]

Originally Posted by anglekindle

- Originally wasn't going to include "Justin" but to better progress the story, he was born. I should thank him though, I think I know how to end this .
- Social is the Canadian Equivilant of History... I hate that subject
- Was going to give Kevin a pet in this part but then it got too long.
- Now you guys know he got the good key . Or did he?

Justin was nice to him even being so much different, so sweet! I guess when he gfets bigger he'll be even nicer (or maybe he only likes small guys. Whops, bad key!)

I agree with you, Social sucks! I hated it too (although... made me improve in my drawings. Inspite of paying attention i was decorating the book with muscle)

If in the end it was the bad key thisn could be like a goosebumps story. Cool!

[anglekindle]

Originally Posted by chocomus

If in the end it was the bad key thisn could be like a goosebumps story. Cool!

Heh Goosebumps... I remember those stupid excuses for horror stories.

[sexiscriptor]

"stupid"!?!! we were all obsessed with them in 2nd grade. Actually, they were stupid most of the time. XD Much like Are You Afraid Of The Dark?
Oh well.

anyway, looks to be a good story; i'd advocate perusing your drafts before posting them. Spellcheck gets obvious mistakes but it doesn't correct missing words or wrong words (dam for damn or vice versa; deer for dear) or things like that--things that aren't really spelt wrong but any reader can pick them out, y'know? Not that there were oodles of mistakes, heh, just a few honest ones that could be cleared up with a cursory pass or two before posting

anyway, looks to be an interesting story; you said you only just added Justin to the story (he sounds like a hottie/sweetheart, btw, ). Is that where Kevin's sudden feelings for him come from--that you only just 'created' this character? heh. or is it something more wicked and devious within the story? hmmm...

we'll just have to find out, i guess....
~Palmer

[anglekindle]

Originally Posted by sexiscriptor

"stupid"!?!! we were all obsessed with them in 2nd grade. Actually, they were stupid most of the time. XD Much like Are You Afraid Of The Dark?
Oh well.

anyway, looks to be a good story; i'd advocate perusing your drafts before posting them. Spellcheck gets obvious mistakes but it doesn't correct missing words or wrong words (dam for damn or vice versa; deer for dear) or things like that--things that aren't really spelt wrong but any reader can pick them out, y'know? Not that there were oodles of mistakes, heh, just a few honest ones that could be cleared up with a cursory pass or two before posting

anyway, looks to be an interesting story; you said you only just added Justin to the story (he sounds like a hottie/sweetheart, btw, ). Is that where Kevin's sudden feelings for him come from--that you only just 'created' this character? heh. or is it something more wicked and devious within the story? hmmm...

we'll just have to find out, i guess....
~Palmer

Hey thanks for the advice. And yes you gotta wait.

-Does a quick check for errors -

[anglekindle]

Kinda stumped right now but making slow progress......