The Wide Prairie Sky Chp. 6

[umlerian49]

Story withdrawn.

[Reeza]

More than 12 chapters!! That's quite a commitment, but good news for us. You're certainly sustaining the quality of your writing.

If you wanted to spoil us even more, you could supplement the descriptions of his muscles with a few other details. I found myself wondering if he has hair on his body. Is his skin pink or golden? Does he look like a giant kid, or is he becoming more like a mature young man? Of course I can imagine whatever I want (and I do) but I like those kinds of details. If that's not the way you want to describe him, that's fine too. I will still be looking forward to every new chapter.

[arpeejay]

Great addition!

xoxo

Richard

[umlerian49]

Originally Posted by Reeza

If you wanted to spoil us even more, you could supplement the descriptions of his muscles with a few other details. I found myself wondering if he has hair on his body. Is his skin pink or golden? Does he look like a giant kid, or is he becoming more like a mature young man? Of course I can imagine whatever I want (and I do) but I like those kinds of details. If that's not the way you want to describe him, that's fine too. I will still be looking forward to every new chapter.

I think that's a reasonable request. I've been very focused on the action, so it might be time for a little more exposition, if you know what I mean. You might have to wait another chapter or two.

[MuscleHintz]

More than 12 chapters? I love that! This has been one of my favorite stories to read because of the prominent plot that manages to supplement the growth sequences with detailed characters and unique personality. Twelve chapters is more than enough for me, but if you want to do more then go for it!

One thing that concerns me; how do you plan on carrying it out that long? I hope that the story maintains its quality throughout, but that may be harder to do as it goes on. Do you plan on introducing new characters? Plot twists? Maybe skip a few years into Alex's future so that we can see how he's changed over time? If you want to keep this attractive to your readers then you should give us something to spice it up and prevent it from growing dull from over twelve chapters.

Don't fret, though. Alex is still far from dull, so keep on writing and impress us with your skill!

[Mdlftr]

kudos! I'm really enjoying the humorous observations by Alex:

"I don?t think Macarthur had this much trouble planning troop movements."


"My legs were getting jammed up under the dash, and with my clown feet turned sideways, I was having trouble working the gas and the brake."


"I suddenly had greater understanding of the story of Narcissus, the beautiful Greek boy that fell so in love with his reflection in a pool that he gazed at it until he starved to death. I wasn?t that far gone, but still?"

Great writing! The naturalistic style, where the narrator states what he observes and feels, without going into omnicience, is enjoyable! Good luck with the future chapters!

Mdlftr

[umlerian49]

Ah-ha! so this is how you do multiple quotes

Originally Posted by MuscleHintz

One thing that concerns me; how do you plan on carrying it out that long? I hope that the story maintains its quality throughout, but that may be harder to do as it goes on. Do you plan on introducing new characters? Plot twists? Maybe skip a few years into Alex's future so that we can see how he's changed over time? If you want to keep this attractive to your readers then you should give us something to spice it up and prevent it from growing dull from over twelve chapters.

I've been putting the finishing touches on chapters 7 and 8, and I'm only about a third of the way through the story arc I've envisioned. Listen, I'm as surprised as anyone. Remember, we've left a whole group of characters behind when Alex went to live on the farm. It may be a while before we see them again. Or not. He's got another whole school year ahead of him.

Originally Posted by Mdlftr

kudos! I'm really enjoying the humorous observations by Alex:

"I don?t think Macarthur had this much trouble planning troop movements."


"My legs were getting jammed up under the dash, and with my clown feet turned sideways, I was having trouble working the gas and the brake."


"I suddenly had greater understanding of the story of Narcissus, the beautiful Greek boy that fell so in love with his reflection in a pool that he gazed at it until he starved to death. I wasn?t that far gone, but still?"

Great writing! The naturalistic style, where the narrator states what he observes and feels, without going into omnicience, is enjoyable! Good luck with the future chapters!

Mdlftr

Thanks! It's nice to know people are picking up on the humor. I think it's an important part of the story. This is escapist stuff, after all.

[Mass Driver]

This story is such a blast. You have hit the nail square on the heasd with this one.
I am laughing just the same way I do when my friends tell me about something starnge happening to them.
That kind of "Would you believe" kind of thing that they don't really believe you'll believe really happened to them. They know it's something that's a little out there but they gotta tell someone, but they expect disbelief.
I always put my foot in it when I start to laugh. Then when they are assuring me it really happened, I have to remind tham that I do, and that the sorta stuff they were talking about is the same screwy funny stuff that the universe keeps throwing at us.
It gets me laughing.
Sometimes the world wants play, and not in such a mean way.
So you gotta laugh with the joke.
In my roundabout way, I'm saying that this feels so real, and still dramatic and funny and touching. (Big Goofy Grin On MY Face)
Please...
Keep Writing.

MD