Big New World Chapter 20

[umlerian49]

Story withdrawn.

[Mass Driver]

Ahhh. Looks like a set up for more drama with Frank.
But at least it isn't with Alex and Ryan.
Neat way to get Alex to go on that trip.
Can't wait for the next chapter.
There is no way any airline could have a restroom big enough
for Alex And Ryan at the same time,
so I doubt they will be joining the MIle High Club.
And those tiny bag of peanuts aren't gonna cut it either.
Not unless they let Alex have fifty of them at once.

Great stuff..
So please,,,
Keep Writing.

MD

[JP71]

This was worth waiting for. I'm so excited about the Miami trip that I'd forgotten that the situation with Frank needed to be re-addressed. I particularly like the idea of Frank hitting the weights, and building even more muscle-bulk. My "Mr Happy" particularly liked the mentioning of that, I must say. And, of course, Alex and Ryan trying on their beachwear, too. Gotta stop reading these on public transport. Good job I had a bag to hide my...er...."reaction" to some of the jucier aspects of this story, otherwise I wouldn't be able to get off the tram.

I hope it's not too long before Ch 21, but I understand that you're busy. I'm busy, too, right now. Some days I'm lucky to write a paragraph. I just hope you devote plenty of the next chapter to sex, muscle, and Alex quickly gaining confidence in his pink little number on the beach. And I hope to God that Lorna Luft doesn't follow them there. That woman has magical powers, I'm convinced of it.

[philat99]

Is Miami Beach ready of Alex??? Looking forward to the antics he'll be getting into.

[Reeza]

Hmmmm. Frank didn't say that Sammy was his hot, hot boyfriend. So who would he be involved with? Am I crazy to think it might be Jason?

Another fine chapter. Try not to be discouraged by fewer comments. That's bound to happen with a long story. It may also have something to do with this time of year - people get distracted by warmer weather, men in shorts and tank tops, shirtless joggers with shiny muscles, etc.

[cesarvillavi]

I know this reply isn't much of a critique and well tought comment but... Your Story is Awesome, Amazing, Deep and so Rich while being hot at the same time. You know how to leave a reader wanting for more with each chapter.

[Ender]

Originally Posted by Reeza

Hmmmm. Frank didn't say that Sammy was his hot, hot boyfriend. So who would he be involved with? Am I crazy to think it might be Jason?

Another fine chapter. Try not to be discouraged by fewer comments. That's bound to happen with a long story. It may also have something to do with this time of year - people get distracted by warmer weather, men in shorts and tank tops, shirtless joggers with shiny muscles, etc.

And guys deciding that having muscles is a lot better than dreaming about muscle and have been hitting the gym... Trying get hooked on it so they turn into gymrats... then after months of obsessive workouts the gymrats began to morph into muscleboys... and I am going to make myself into a serious MuscleBoy... which is part of the reason I have been absent... That and I figured I would stop annoying people with my unwanted chatter... although it is a hard habit to break...

Ender